Can you edit my proposal and 3000-word paper? ill attach the document and the feedback given.
my research question is does minimum wage effect unemployment
this is the proposal feedback: ” You haven’t clearly stated your topic, but I’m assuming you intend to study the effect of minimum wage increases on unemployment in the U.S. If that’s correct, please confirm it and finalize your topic so we can move forward. It needs to be clearly defined.
There is already a lot of research on the effects of minimum wage changes on low-skilled workers and different demographic groups. You’ll need to include more relevant citations from that literature.
Are you focusing on employment or unemployment? These are not the same, and your draft needs to be more precise. It seems like you’re planning to use an instrumental variables (IV) approach. You also mentioned this in your econometrics presentation. Do you know how to implement an IV model correctly? Make sure you’re clear on the methods you plan to use. I don’t see a model in your proposal.
In your list of objectives, you’re trying to do too much. You’ll need to narrow your focus. For example, how exactly do you plan to identify sectors vulnerable to automation? That part is vague. Also, your goal to “assess the influence of different research methodologies” is unclear—do you mean comparing different econometric models?
Be specific: minimum wage policies can occur at both the state and federal level. You need to clearly identify any policy you’re studying—when it was enacted, what it changed, and who it affected.
Your research question needs significant revision. Are you studying the effect of the minimum wage (not “salary”) on employment? On unemployment? On overall welfare? Be specific about what aspect of the labor market you’re analyzing.
You mention “varying methodological methods”—do you mean different econometric techniques? And what do you mean by “living wage”? That term is distinct from “minimum wage” and has a different policy meaning. This section reads as if it was written by AI—it replaces terms just to avoid repetition but ends up introducing confusion.
I highlighted some of your references because they’re either weak or not relevant to your topic. You also need to fix the citation formatting—we’ll go over that in more detail later.
- If you want to include automation, the most famous paper about that is written by Acemoglu (or Acemoglu and Restrepo).
- If you want to include skills and the difference in wages, Acemoglu and David Card have some good papers.”
this is the literature review feedback: “Employment and unemployment are not the same thing, but you’re using them interchangeably. More employment is not the same as 1 minus the unemployment rate. These are completely different concepts. The employment rate reflects the percentage of working-age people who are employed the unemployment rate measures the percentage of the labor force that is unemployed and actively seeking work.
Are you planning to use data from multiple countries? If not, you don’t need a full section on international studies of the minimum wage. You can briefly mention that similar trends appear in other countries within a paragraph.
The same goes for the discussion of long-term effects. Only include it if it directly supports your analysis.
Everything after section 8 doesn’t belong in the literature review. In your first draft, you need to explain the data you are using, not all the data that exist in the literature.”
